1. Pre-reading questions
2. Structure of the text
3. Detailed study of the text
Paraphrase the following sentences.
1. Then as you penetrate deeper into the bazaar, the noise of the entrance fades away,
and you come to the muted cloth-market.
2. They narrow down their choice and begin the really serious business of beating the
price down.
Key:
1. Then as you pass through a big crowd to go deeper into the market, the noise of the
entrance gradually disappear, and you come to the much quieter cloth-market.
2. They drop some of items that they don’t really want and begin to bargain seriously
or a low price.
Compare the following two paragraphs and try to identify the concrete sensory details that add vividness to the final draft.
First draft
When I first met Oma, she looked very old and a bit over-weight. She wore a house dress, an apron, and loafers. She was deaf in one ear, and there was something wrong with the muscles in her face. Oma shuffled when she walked and had to hold on to the furniture. Despite his disability, and the fact that she lived alone, Oma’s house looked neat, but there were signs that her eyes had become weak.
Final draft
When I first met Oma six years ago, she looked about eighty years old and a few pounds over-weight for her medium frame. She wore a flowered house dress, a starched apron, and old, scuffed leather loafers. She was deaf in one ear from a neglected childhood ear infection, and half of her face drooped from Bell’s Palsy. She shuffled her feet and held on to the furniture with swollen, scarred hands as she waled. Despite Oma’s disability and the fact that she lived alone, her house looked neat, but there were small crumbs and strains on the tables, and particles of food were stuck to some of the dishes, unnoticed by eyes weakened with age.
Key:
Final Draft | concrete sensory details that add vividness |
When I first met Oma six years ago, she looked about eighty years old and a few pounds over-weight for her medium frame (1). She wore aflowered house dress, a starched apron, and old, scuffed leather loafers (2). She was deaf in one ear from a neglected childhood ear infection, and half of her face drooped from Bell’s Palsy (3). She shuffled her feet and held on to the furniture with swollen, scarred hands (4) as she walked. Despite Oma’s disability and the fact that she lived alone, her house looked neat, but there were small crumbs and strains on the tables, and particles of food were stuck to some of the dishes (5), unnoticed by eyes weakened with age. | (1) These concrete visual details make description more accurate and vivid. (2) Add specific details. (3) show what was wrong with Oma (4) visual details (5) visual details to clarify what were the “signs” indicating her eyes had become weak |
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